If You Feel Down....Don't Read!

Busman747 · 27-04-2005, 22:39

I advise any accywebber that is feeling down NOT to read this little story.....Read it slow and you will find that much of it is in poetic form.

The story is sad but there is a moral to be learnt in its telling. :e9: :e9:

THIS WILL MAKE YOU CRY….

Jenny was so happy about the house they had found. For once in her life 'twas on the right side of town. She unpacked her things with such great ease. As she watched her new curtains blow in the breeze. How wonderful it was to have her own room. School would be starting; she'd have friends over soon. There'd be sleep-overs, and parties; she was so happy It's just the way she wanted her life to be.

On the first day of school, everything went great. She made new friends and even got a date! She thought, "I want to be popular and I'm going to be, Because I just got a date with the star of the team!" To be known in this school you had to have clout, And dating this guy would sure help her out.

There was only one problem stopping her fate. Her parents had said she was too young to date. "Well I just won't tell them the entire truth. They won't know the difference; what's there to lose?" Jenny asked to stay with her friends that night. Her parents frowned but said, "All right." Excited, she got ready for the big event But as she rushed around like she had no sense, She began to feel guilty about all the lies, But what's a pizza, a party, and a moonlight ride?

Well the pizza was good, and the party was great, But the moonlight ride would have to wait. For Dan was half drunk by this time. But he kissed her and said that he was just fine. Then the room filled with smoke and Dan took a puff. Jenny couldn't believe he was smoking that stuff. Now Dan was ready to ride to the point But only after he'd smoked another joint.

They jumped in the car for the moonlight ride, Not thinking that he was too drunk to drive. They finally made it to the point at last, And Dan started trying to make a pass. A pass is not what Jenny wanted at all (and by a pass, I don't mean playing football.) "Perhaps my parents were right....maybe I am too young. Boy, how could I ever, ever be so dumb." With all of her might, she pushed Dan away: "Please take me home, I don't want to stay."

Dan cranked up the engine and floored the gas. In a matter of seconds they were going too fast. As Dan drove on in a fit of wild anger, Jenny knew that her life was in danger. She begged and pleaded for him to slow down, But he just got faster as they neared the town. "Just let me get home! I'll confess that I lied. I really went out for a moonlight ride."

Then all of a sudden, she saw a big flash. "Oh God, Please help us! We're going to crash!" She doesn't remember the force of impact. Just that everything all of a sudden went black. She felt someone remove her from the twisted rubble, And heard, "call an ambulance! These kids are in trouble! Voices she heard...a few words at best. But she knew there were two cars involved in the wreck. Then wondered to herself if Dan was all right, And if the people in the other car was alive.

She awoke in the hospital to faces so sad. "You've been in a wreck and it looks pretty bad." These voices echoed inside her head, As they gently told her that Dan was dead. They said "Jenny, we've done all we can do. But it looks as if we'll lose you too." "But the people in the other car!?" Jenny cried. "We're sorry, Jenny, they also died." Jenny prayed, "God, forgive me for what I've done I only wanted to have just one night of fun." "Tell those people's family, I've made their lives dim, And wish I could return their families to them." "Tell Mom and Dad I'm sorry I lied, And that it's my fault so many have died. Oh, nurse, won't you please tell them that for me?" The nurse just stood there-she never agreed. But took Jenny's hand with tears in her eyes…………….. And a few moments later, Jenny died.

A man asked the nurse, "Why didn't you do your best To bid that girl her one last request?" She looked at the man with eyes so sad. "Because the people in the other car were her mom and dad." This story is sad and unpleasant but true, So young people take heed, it could have been you.

cashman · 27-04-2005, 22:54

this will make you cry-busman you are right.one of the most tragic things i have ever read.

grannyclaret · 28-04-2005, 11:36

oh my god whoever wrote that should get an oscar !
..................................

it hit all the right buttons ,
it touchedyour heart
it touched your conscience
it sent out a message that anyone can understand .
PLEASE EVERYONE DIGEST THAT POEM/POETRY .............

janet · 28-04-2005, 11:45

Wow, it really makes you think.
Well worth the read busman.

Sara · 28-04-2005, 15:53

How dreadful Busman. Wonder if it's true. Though you should have wrote at the top: definately read if feeling down, i personally have had a really sh*t day and feel like cr*p but after reading that, i thought well i'm still alive.

MUMMIBOO · 29-04-2005, 09:30

Oh my god ive got goose bumps,.

harwood red · 29-04-2005, 12:46

oh ...................... I'm speechless and currently typing through a veil of tears, sat at my desk at work, keeping my head down

Billcat · 29-04-2005, 15:15

I've seen that poem many times before, and am of the opinion that whoever wrote it is trying way too hard. As I am generally not a fan of this sort of this sort of thing, the only things that I find depressing about it are the rather transparent and, IMHO, blatant attempt to manipulate the audience's emotions, and the generaly poor quality of the poetry.

Busman747 · 30-04-2005, 00:46

Poor poetry it may be.........but I think everyone recognises the psychological problems that the youth of today go through.

As adults, we can see the wrongs of this girls decision to "take a ride" but how do you explain this to your own daughter? She sees it as a bit of "excitement".......but the reality only hits after the truth of her actions have happened............

scooby12 · 30-04-2005, 04:03

That was very sad to read but,i wonder if it is a true story,like someone has said it should be shown to the younger generation.

slinky · 30-04-2005, 10:37

It certainly hit a cord for me...........nice one busman, could happen to anyone.

grannyclaret · 30-04-2005, 11:18

i first read this a couple of days ago ,and i cant get it out of my mind ....its so touching.......i think i am just soppy at heart

vorlon24 · 03-05-2005, 12:55

I saw something similar to that awhile back, but I can't remember where now.

Here is something that got me going - I have a daughter who is nearly 3:

*~*~*Sarah*~*~*

My name is Sarah
I am but three,
My eyes are swollen
I cannot see.

I must be stupid
I must be bad,
What else could have made
My daddy so mad?

I wish I were better
I wish I weren't ugly,
Then maybe my mommy
Would still want to hug me.

I can't speak at all
I can't do a wrong
Or else I'm locked up
All the day long.

When I awake I'm all alone
The house is dark
My folks aren't home

When my mommy does come
I'll try and be nice,
So maybe I'll get just
One whipping tonight.

Don't make a sound!
I just heard a car
My daddy is back
From Charlie's Bar.

I hear him curse
My name he calls
I press myself
Against the wall.

I try and hide
From his evil eyes
I'm so afraid now
I'm starting to cry.

He finds me weeping
He shouts ugly words,
He says its my fault
That he suffers at work.

He slaps me and hits me
And yells at me more,
I finally get free
And I run for the door.

He's already locked it
And I start to bawl,
He takes me and throws me
Against the hard wall.

I fall to the floor
With my bones nearly broken,
And my daddy continues
With more bad words spoken.

"I'm sorry!" I scream
But it’s now much too late
His face has been twisted
Into unimaginable hate.

The hurt and the pain
Again and again
Oh please God, have mercy!
Oh please let it end!

And he finally stops
And heads for the door,
While I lay there motionless
Sprawled on the floor.

My name is Sarah
And I am but three,
Tonight my daddy
Murdered me.

Busman747 · 03-05-2005, 15:55

Thats tragic Vorlon.....and I would be surprised if the author wasn't remembering his/her experiences:e9:

vorlon24 · 03-05-2005, 16:12

I still can't comprehend why anyone would want to do that sort of thing, especially to such a young child.

Even when mine is throwing a tantrum (and she does quite a few of them!) I would still never even consider harming her